My Beloved
a poetic response to "The Sound of Hollyhocks" by Hugh Garner
My
beloved
When I
brought you home
My
unbearable mother and you provoked a horrible argument
That
night was a disaster
My
beloved
When our
house were cheerless and empty
I waited
for you until the sun rose again but you never came back
That
night was a disaster
My
beloved
When you
were gone in an accident with another man in the night
You have
destroyed my only confidence and faith
That night was a disaster
My
beloved
When I
heard the sweet little voice of the hollyhocks
I felt
like I was talking to you again
That night was not a disaster anymore
The
voice was by my side since then
Just
like how you were always rest on my shoulders
Now I am
gone and never coming back to this hopeless world
Just like how you left me and never appeared again
I like your format which has the repeat. It is really good!
ReplyDeleteI really love the format! It transferred Bill's despair and how suffering he felt. Even though you mentioned the Hollyhocks brought Bill acquaintance and hope, the poem ended in a sad mode. Feeling regretful for BIll :(
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You wrote the inside feeling of how Bill wants to say to Sandra, I like it!
ReplyDeleteThat night was a disaster for sure...Anyways, nice poem! And great picture!
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Mimi my god this is amazing
ReplyDeleteI can right away tell that "my beloved" is Sandra, and how much Bill misses her.
I also love how you've connected his hallucination to the grief and the despair from missing Sandra.
I like the way you repeat "that night was a disaster" which makes sense to me. We'll done!
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your poem is clearly and exactly, I can feel a sorrowful situation that you are talking about.
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